Comments on: Erased http://www.fantasy-magazine.com/2008/04/erased/#utm_source=rss&utm_medium=rss&utm_campaign=erased From Modern Mythcraft to Magical Surrealism Mon, 15 Mar 2010 01:40:38 -0600 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.5 hourly 1 By: Fantasy Magazine « Words, Words, Words http://www.fantasy-magazine.com/2008/04/erased/comment-page-1/#comment-10143 Fantasy Magazine « Words, Words, Words Fri, 24 Apr 2009 01:08:49 +0000 http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=512#comment-10143 [...] suggested: Story 1: “Erased” by Elena Gleason http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=512 Story 2: “The Small Door” by Holly Phillips http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=546 [...] [...] suggested: Story 1: “Erased” by Elena Gleason http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=512 Story 2: “The Small Door” by Holly Phillips http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=546 [...]

]]> By: Fantasy Magazine » Notable Stories Of 2008! http://www.fantasy-magazine.com/2008/04/erased/comment-page-1/#comment-10110 Fantasy Magazine » Notable Stories Of 2008! Mon, 20 Apr 2009 12:16:56 +0000 http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=512#comment-10110 [...] Erased by Elena Gleason [...] [...] Erased by Elena Gleason [...]

]]> By: Jonathan Rock http://www.fantasy-magazine.com/2008/04/erased/comment-page-1/#comment-10032 Jonathan Rock Mon, 13 Apr 2009 03:08:29 +0000 http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=512#comment-10032 Fans of this story might also like Green Glass by Gene Wolfe. Fans of this story might also like Green Glass by Gene Wolfe.

]]> By: MLV http://www.fantasy-magazine.com/2008/04/erased/comment-page-1/#comment-9907 MLV Tue, 31 Mar 2009 11:16:38 +0000 http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=512#comment-9907 I agreed with the comment that the story felt done after he disappeared, the moment I finished reading. I re-read the last paragraph a few more times after reading the comment to see if I could tie it into the plot (which was well constructed) and gave up. It feels more like a stray afterward, disconnected from the build-up. I couldn't tell if she was reclaiming something, or if it was just wishful thinking, or if it bode finality... and to be frank I really didn't want it regardless of what it showed me. But despite my personal frustration over that handful of lines it was an overall good read and worth more than the small amount of time I invested (including this comment). I personally liked how the POV was so strong she (or the plot for that matter) didn't attach any value to his verbal responses. ""You’re vanishing.”:: “No, I’m not.” He sat up. “Hey, I’m right here.” I could feel him becoming less solid, fading away[...]" It may take two people to sustain a relationship but it only takes one to end it. And you said it with smooth, flowing symbolism. I agreed with the comment that the story felt done after he disappeared, the moment I finished reading. I re-read the last paragraph a few more times after reading the comment to see if I could tie it into the plot (which was well constructed) and gave up. It feels more like a stray afterward, disconnected from the build-up. I couldn’t tell if she was reclaiming something, or if it was just wishful thinking, or if it bode finality… and to be frank I really didn’t want it regardless of what it showed me.

But despite my personal frustration over that handful of lines it was an overall good read and worth more than the small amount of time I invested (including this comment). I personally liked how the POV was so strong she (or the plot for that matter) didn’t attach any value to his verbal responses.

“”You’re vanishing.”::

“No, I’m not.” He sat up. “Hey, I’m right here.”

I could feel him becoming less solid, fading away[...]”

It may take two people to sustain a relationship but it only takes one to end it. And you said it with smooth, flowing symbolism.

]]> By: Alexander Grace http://www.fantasy-magazine.com/2008/04/erased/comment-page-1/#comment-9828 Alexander Grace Wed, 25 Mar 2009 02:31:59 +0000 http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=512#comment-9828 Wow. I just clicked this because of the poll, to be honest. But it's very original. I love how you used the fantastic to illustrate a real-life principle. This is truly original. Not to sound condescending, since I am younger than you, but it's impressive that one so young could be so thoroughly original. Most writers would say it's impossible for younglings like you and I. =P Very good work. Perhaps this is simply the culture in which I grew up, but I would have made it a husband, instead of a boyfriend. Perhaps it's the permanence. But then again in our world marriage is not permanent. So, forget I said anything. Awesome work, and I look forward to seeing more of your writing! Wow. I just clicked this because of the poll, to be honest. But it’s very original. I love how you used the fantastic to illustrate a real-life principle. This is truly original. Not to sound condescending, since I am younger than you, but it’s impressive that one so young could be so thoroughly original. Most writers would say it’s impossible for younglings like you and I. =P

Very good work. Perhaps this is simply the culture in which I grew up, but I would have made it a husband, instead of a boyfriend. Perhaps it’s the permanence. But then again in our world marriage is not permanent. So, forget I said anything.

Awesome work, and I look forward to seeing more of your writing!

]]> By: randall pretzer http://www.fantasy-magazine.com/2008/04/erased/comment-page-1/#comment-9741 randall pretzer Sat, 14 Mar 2009 07:18:57 +0000 http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=512#comment-9741 One of the most original stories I have read in awhile. A very unique idea and brilliant metaphor for a love that died. The key was towards the end where she thought back about what they use to do and how it use to be. So many women and men said in their marriages it is different later on. The marriage gets routine. This story seems to illustrate that. A spouse who is always at work or out with friends or anywhere but home with their spouse. This seems to be an analogy for that. The most sad part came at the end when he said he was there and that he loved her and then he disappeared. He didn't know what was happening. This is so true for a lot of spouses they don't realize what little time they are spending with their spouse until sometimes it is too late. One of the most original stories I have read in awhile. A very unique idea and brilliant metaphor for a love that died. The key was towards the end where she thought back about what they use to do and how it use to be. So many women and men said in their marriages it is different later on. The marriage gets routine. This story seems to illustrate that. A spouse who is always at work or out with friends or anywhere but home with their spouse. This seems to be an analogy for that. The most sad part came at the end when he said he was there and that he loved her and then he disappeared. He didn’t know what was happening. This is so true for a lot of spouses they don’t realize what little time they are spending with their spouse until sometimes it is too late.

]]> By: Angelica http://www.fantasy-magazine.com/2008/04/erased/comment-page-1/#comment-9451 Angelica Thu, 05 Feb 2009 04:07:58 +0000 http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=512#comment-9451 Oh wow. What a hauntingly beautiful, yet horribly sad story. It made me tear up and just the thought of having your loved one erased is just--totally saddening. Congrats on getting this story published. It is amazing. Oh wow. What a hauntingly beautiful, yet horribly sad story. It made me tear up and just the thought of having your loved one erased is just–totally saddening.

Congrats on getting this story published. It is amazing.

]]> By: Catherine J Gardner http://www.fantasy-magazine.com/2008/04/erased/comment-page-1/#comment-9443 Catherine J Gardner Wed, 04 Feb 2009 16:48:40 +0000 http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=512#comment-9443 Congratulations, Elena. An outstanding first story, and I agree with the others, one that lingers after you've finished. Congratulations, Elena.

An outstanding first story, and I agree with the others, one that lingers after you’ve finished.

]]> By: Fantasy Magazine » Best Fantasy Story Of 2008 Poll And Contest http://www.fantasy-magazine.com/2008/04/erased/comment-page-1/#comment-9429 Fantasy Magazine » Best Fantasy Story Of 2008 Poll And Contest Tue, 03 Feb 2009 21:25:07 +0000 http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=512#comment-9429 [...] Voting is closed and the winner has been announced: Erased by Elena [...] [...] Voting is closed and the winner has been announced: Erased by Elena [...]

]]> By: Elena Gleason http://www.fantasy-magazine.com/2008/04/erased/comment-page-1/#comment-9392 Elena Gleason Sat, 31 Jan 2009 21:01:50 +0000 http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=512#comment-9392 Thanks for all the lovely comments, everyone. I really appreciate the feedback. I'm so glad you all liked it. Thanks for all the lovely comments, everyone. I really appreciate the feedback. I’m so glad you all liked it.

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