Comments on: Puppet Strings: Rachel Swirsky http://www.fantasy-magazine.com/2008/07/puppet-strings-rachel-swirsky/#utm_source=rss&utm_medium=rss&utm_campaign=puppet-strings-rachel-swirsky From Modern Mythcraft to Magical Surrealism Fri, 12 Mar 2010 10:09:53 -0700 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.5 hourly 1 By: This Week @ Fantasy at K. Tempest Bradford http://www.fantasy-magazine.com/2008/07/puppet-strings-rachel-swirsky/comment-page-1/#comment-2483 This Week @ Fantasy at K. Tempest Bradford Fri, 04 Jul 2008 15:36:27 +0000 http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=652#comment-2483 [...] Marrying the Sun, by the writer to watch out for, Rachel Swirsky.  Rachel has also agreed to do a Puppet Strings Author Spotlight for us, so go over there and ask her questions about her story and [...] [...] Marrying the Sun, by the writer to watch out for, Rachel Swirsky.  Rachel has also agreed to do a Puppet Strings Author Spotlight for us, so go over there and ask her questions about her story and [...]

]]> By: Matt’s Bookosphere 7/01/08 « Enter the Octopus http://www.fantasy-magazine.com/2008/07/puppet-strings-rachel-swirsky/comment-page-1/#comment-2278 Matt’s Bookosphere 7/01/08 « Enter the Octopus Wed, 02 Jul 2008 04:30:45 +0000 http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=652#comment-2278 [...] Why puppets, Rachel Swirsky? [...] [...] Why puppets, Rachel Swirsky? [...]

]]> By: Rachel http://www.fantasy-magazine.com/2008/07/puppet-strings-rachel-swirsky/comment-page-1/#comment-2274 Rachel Tue, 01 Jul 2008 23:06:59 +0000 http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=652#comment-2274 Gah, you're right. I don't know about jargon (which was actually pulled out of a book on wedding dresses long before my engagement), but the "went up" repetition is pretty bad. Looks to me like it was a late draft addition to fix some sort of early draft problem which I didn't catch on final read. Gah, you’re right. I don’t know about jargon (which was actually pulled out of a book on wedding dresses long before my engagement), but the “went up” repetition is pretty bad. Looks to me like it was a late draft addition to fix some sort of early draft problem which I didn’t catch on final read.

]]> By: Alex Madlinger http://www.fantasy-magazine.com/2008/07/puppet-strings-rachel-swirsky/comment-page-1/#comment-2265 Alex Madlinger Tue, 01 Jul 2008 14:12:39 +0000 http://www.darkfantasy.org/fantasy/?p=652#comment-2265 Weding on Saturday? Congrats. I personally think it is the human desire that draws them to mythological gods. Some of the desire may be sexual, but I think that most of it would be emotional. We tend to see the best in our partners, mainly because we desire the best in them. The fact that wea are driven to the most beautiful woman, the man with the largest muscles, is proof of this. Also there is the idea that gods *should* be perfect. Who doesn't want a relationship that doesn't have arguements? I am new here and I do not know if this is appropriate, but I would like to offer some critique on your story from yesterday. You should consider your whole audience when you right--I know you just went through a wedding and had all that stuff in your mind when you wrote it, but not everyone knows it or remembers it for their wedding. Your first paragraph was clunky and jargony, and slightly repetitive (using "went up" twice as I recall). It really drove me away from the story, sad because the first line is a real killer. The wedding went well until the bride caught fire... ;) Please don't take offense to my comment; I'm just offering you another opinion. You're the one publishing, not me. Weding on Saturday? Congrats.

I personally think it is the human desire that draws them to mythological gods. Some of the desire may be sexual, but I think that most of it would be emotional. We tend to see the best in our partners, mainly because we desire the best in them. The fact that wea are driven to the most beautiful woman, the man with the largest muscles, is proof of this. Also there is the idea that gods *should* be perfect. Who doesn’t want a relationship that doesn’t have arguements?

I am new here and I do not know if this is appropriate, but I would like to offer some critique on your story from yesterday. You should consider your whole audience when you right–I know you just went through a wedding and had all that stuff in your mind when you wrote it, but not everyone knows it or remembers it for their wedding. Your first paragraph was clunky and jargony, and slightly repetitive (using “went up” twice as I recall). It really drove me away from the story, sad because the first line is a real killer. The wedding went well until the bride caught fire… ;)

Please don’t take offense to my comment; I’m just offering you another opinion. You’re the one publishing, not me.

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